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Created: February 27, 2015 | Updated: June 29, 2017
Genre : Supernatural
Language : English
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Although I am not much of a were-wolf enthusiast, I enjoyed very much your story. Especially using good German names and a good description of Germany in its time. They are all accurate and correct. Good job!
The end was quite surprising as Heinrich got killed by (that sly dog) Karl-Heinz. Sorry for my language.
Good story and loved the details.Just a suggestion: You could add some more action in time when you know who the were-wolf is and what Heinrich is up to. Perhaps adding for example how Heinrich plans to revenge before letting it all out in the open, like trying to catch or shot him.
Cheers! ^.^
April 26, 2015 | Fiona DayDreamer
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Bachmeir was very cunning and manipulative in the whole plot. He covered his tracks really well, by creating the beast inside the would be hero, only for Heinrich's werewolf to be passed off as the murderer. Now, the town is free forever, Bachmeir can start his attacks elsewhere.
The story sent shivers down my spine, with excitement and fear at the same time. I enjoyed the intensity and the horror. Reminded me of 'An American Werewolf In London.'
I really enjoyed it. Your writing technic is World Class. Very well done.
May 31, 2015 | Cardiff 1984
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Although I am not very interested in werewolves, it`s refreshing to finally see a werewolf story that isn`t a rip-off of Twilight with all the romance and stuff. The ending was also quite interesting, as killing off the main character in the very end isn`t something that happens a lot in most stories, but it`s even cooler because he actually became a werewolf for a while. The writing is great and feels like reading an old-fashioned supernatural story, the only problem for me is that it doesn`t feel like there`s much action, and many of the scenes seem kind of static, but I think maybe that`s just my 15-year old mind talking.
June 1, 2015 | Alexandria Francetic
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This is so good! I'm so glad I finally got around to reading one of your stories, I love the amount of careful detail you put into each chapter. You should consider continuing this, I see a lot of potential! :)
June 17, 2015 | Talia Hale
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A great intro and good back ground. Love the descriptions too. However, I was always taught not to put 'and' and 'but' in a sentence after a comer. Yet, when I've sent my work in to different editors, some have said no, some have said yes!! It's dam confusing. I personally do not do it and find the use of it a little messy. I'm going to do more research on that one ;)
I love the whole werewolf genre and shifters but I like the romantic idea that they are either human or animal, not a Hollywood version with lots of teeth, drool and ripping flesh. It will be interesting to find out which way yours goes.
March 29, 2015 | S.D Stevens
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A good prorogue, which leads the reader though interesting statistics and ideas to an invitation to open your mind and read on. However, the flow was a little stunted by the commentary style used in a few of the paragraphs.
June 11, 2015 | S.D Stevens
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The dialogue is very flamboyant but fitting with the time. I sense an excitement between the men, the impending hunt is on the horizon.
I am struggling reading the chunks of dialogue but it's because its all perfect.... too perfect, I feel like adding a 'tallyhoo, old man!' to the end. Read your dialogue out loud. Yes, theres are a bunch of educated men but I do feel a little personalisation to the dialogue would help identify characters.
June 11, 2015 | S.D Stevens
