Sparkatale

Hi my name Heather and I would like for you to read my prologue and first chapter of my story Tripped. I have tons of comments already by trading. But I have found that on the other cites I have posted on more than half of the people who read my book don't read the second chapter. So there must be something in my first chapter that is driving people away. Now this doesn't necessarily mean that I would be willing to completely change it to appease the masses but, I don't think it would hurt to have your opinion. If you could PM me your thoughts I would appropriate it.

Heather O'toole /Davies | February 15, 2014

Definitely feel free to tear apart any of the short stories listed in Collective Brevity (my only work on this site). I have extremely tough skin and am here for the sole purpose of improving. My work seems largely removed from the collective average writing pieces I've read from this site so hopefully that will lead to some against the grain critique. PM or comment works, happy to read works of a similar nature or at least similar length in return or in general.

L. W. | February 15, 2014

If you would look at some of the drabbles in my collection "Every Hundred Words," I'd really appreciate it! You don't have to read it through, but skip around to ones that you find interesting. I have had some really good feedback on the start to my novel, Ensis, but I think I should work on it more before others read it. :) Thanks! Hopefully, I'll be able to read your works within the next week.

Kobayashi Kyoko | February 16, 2014

Hello, madam. I am Zabel Seishimugen, in need of your assistance. I have completed two chapters of Chaos Champions Chronicles, yet I feel as if they could use some adjustments. If you have time, may you analyze both of the chapters and inform me of any necessary changes needed within the story to better convey the story to my fellow bibliophiles. I thank thee, madam, and I shall be at your debt for your assistance.

Zabel Seishimugen | February 19, 2014

Hi, I would be in your debt if you were to read my Helena Hawthorn story and would be able to give me some feedback. I really want to improve, but it's hard to do so without any comments or critisizms. Thank you, ~MF~

May Freighter | March 8, 2014

Hi. If you can critique my story The Amnesic, i would be grateful! 

Angel Origins | May 22, 2014

Hi.

If you're not too terribly busy, would you mind reading my story: Callie Cameron - Country Chaos .

I'm not sure how many words it has, and I will warn you, it's not very good. It's my first real attempt at a non-fanfiction. So please, any way i can improve, let me know.

Thanks.

Laterz!

Keely Kelly | September 12, 2014