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Heywo,
I am 23, 24 this August. I love writing, anime, manga, Asian Dramas, romance, cake, the list goes on....
So yeah, I write, a lot. And hopefully you will enjoy my work.
Mostly, I post my work on wattpad: @MayFreighter (If you're planning to look me up).
I would love for some reviews and comments, they help me keep going.
Love you all,
~MF~
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Helena Hawthorn - Russian Roulette
Thank you so much for the feedback, that was very helpful! I will try my best to improve the characters further. I've read the story so many times that after a whole what's in your head get's jumbled up with what's on paper/laptop screen.
I'll try to fix the setting too, to make it clearer. Again, Thank you very much for the honest feedback!
~MF~
Commented on: March 9, 2014
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My Werewolf Fantasy Becomes My Reality
Hey, loved the chapter. Just thought I'd point out two spelling mistakes I found:
1. seven too eight, 2. time argues about
Some commas were missing (I think i tend to put too many in so my beta's tend to remove them for me).
But the story itself keeps the reader interested. :D
~MF~
Commented on: March 8, 2014
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Helena Hawthorn - Russian Roulette
Haha, he did initially. I think one of my betas suggested that I remove it for some peculiar reason I don't recall anymore. 3 drafts took so long that I wanted to cry.
~MF~
Commented on: March 8, 2014
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My Werewolf Fantasy Becomes My Reality
Hey, I know what it's like not to get feedback, but I think good or bad feedback is great. Your writing style is interesting, it feels very natural. I think in the first paragraph you may overuse a few words (I think unknowingly we all end up doing it sometimes).
Personally, I haven't written a first person story before, although I have read a ton. (This is basically a personal way of thinking here) I believe you may be going too much into the lead characters description which leaves little to the imagination - again, personal opinion - loads of people prefer it this way.
~MF~
Commented on: March 7, 2014