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I'll Just Leave The Pieces Here - Second Draft

By: Danny Power Hallihan (Dormant)

Status: In Progress

Summary:

*Some chapters and phrases were corrupted when transitioning between first and second draft, will be fixed soon.* A story about growing up and growing old, four friends deal with everything life has to offer. When a sudden and unexpected loss rocks the group to their core, they are held together by a single promise. This novel will explore their lives as they leave the bubble of student life and into the cold and uncaring world around them, but no matter where they end up in the world, they will always have each other.

Created: January 28, 2019 | Updated: December 31, 2019

Genre : General

Language : English

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  • Just Another Reader

    I just read the whole book and the way you handled all four characters at once was really well done! They all grow older and further away from Jacob but at the same time he's still there! I felt really bad for Noah with everything he went through, but that last chapter with Nora was perfect! I know you're fixing stuff but it was really really good!

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    August 18, 2019 Flag


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    • Chapter: 2 Reply

      I love the way that Jacob was written! Especially with his dog! I wonder what the deal is with Nora and Gabriel, why is he calling her if they're over? It was really well-written, I hope Jacob's okay at the end of the chapter, though!

      March 14, 2019 | Just Another Reader


    • Reply

      Thanks so much for commenting!

      I'm glad you enjoyed it, it was really fun writing Jacob because I have such a clear vision of who he is and how integral he will be in the story. Nora is going to go through a character arc that will test her friendship with everybody else. I hope you enjoy the rest of the story!

      As for Gabriel... there's not much for him right now, but maybe in the next draft. We'll see!

      March 25, 2019 | Danny Power Hallihan (Dormant)


    • Chapter: 3 Reply

      Oh another character! Aayush seems interesting, especially when he counts to himself. Reminds me of Percy from your last book somehow!

      Poor Jacob! It looks like he had too much, but it looks like this is building up to something. I'm scared to ask! The way the friends talk is really well done, I can see this happening in real life. Other than some spelling mistakes I loved it!

      May 9, 2019 | Just Another Reader


    • Chapter: 4 Reply

      Wow... Noah's a mess.

      I was reading there, that phone call with Nora about Jacob, it sounded pretty serious. Noah looks like he's a guy down on his luck. The scene where Jacob admits the diagnosis felt really serious! Keep it up!

      June 10, 2019 | Just Another Reader


    • Reply

      Wow... I honestly forgot to write back to your response I'm so sorry! ^^' 

      I just saw that you gave a five-star reivew as well, thank you so much! I don't feel like it's five-star quality just yet (but that's what the editing is for xD) but I'm really glad you enjoyed it and you felt like they all melded together. It was a struggle juggling all those storylines but it's all worth it in the end. 

      I'm looking at making a story based on Eamersdr (because I need to go back to fantasy) and another novel called I. Am. Aidan. Ianess so you'll see more from me xD 

      Thanks again, seriously!

      August 18, 2019 | Danny Power Hallihan (Dormant)


    • Chapter: 5 Reply

      Oh my god, you wrote a really deep chapter here! You're really good at writing different things at once, mixing Nora's day with what happened with Jacob. They're all so worried for him! I thought he was gone at the end! T_T I really loved it, this is really good so far!

      July 13, 2019 | Just Another Reader