Sparkatale

Opening: for some reason, the repeated use of “eye” and “sea” stuck out at me and somewhat tarnished what was otherwise a poetic chapter.

 “Tell me, Nesrin, where is Kaellach?” he asked, hatred filling his voice as he said the name of the man who was his sworn enemy and who used to be his closest friend.

 You might consider preceding this passage with “spoiler” alert. If not, then consider deleting the second half of the narration. Tone and a brief description should be enough.

 Perhaps consider:

 “Tell me Nesrin, where is Kaellach?” he asked spitefully.