Sparkatale

Good chapter, but the paragraph talking about why someone would want a horn got a little choppy. Otherwise I don't have much to critique. Nice work.

Thanks so much! I'll try and fix that choppy part up. ^^

Alright, so, to start off, that first paragraph was beautiful. Actually, the entire chapter was beautiful in it's own right- the sense of writing style here is descriptive, poetic and elegant, but the first paragraph was a flippin' amazing start to a story. Zombie stories are starting to get really overused these days, but this one has a twist that I'm confident with saying has never been used before. (Also, the description of the zombie was excellent.) The world seems fairly well-built with the lack of the typical "zombie story with an effort to make original" kind of vibe. We've seen it all done on the Walking Dead- except for unicorns and humans who hunt them. That's different, so five points for originality. I couldn't find any errors here and the flow was nice and smooth. The ending sentence was almost as strong as the starting one. You're an amazing writer- keep it up.

aw! Thank you so much!!

Really, really good. The opening grabbed my attention and your descriptions are vivid. One teensy little problem I found was that when you say what happening to unicorns and their horns and about the disease it a little like an info dump. Not always bad and sometimes necessary, but I think it might make things more interesting if you only reveal little bits at a time about why the unicorn is being hunted. Then again, it's your story and I have absolutely no idea what you've got planned for the future, so maybe this was necessary. Don't let this tiny critique make you think I didn't like. I loved it. Overall, a very engaging and interesting first chapter. :)

Thank you! :)