A High School Hate Story, a Fan Fiction story

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GEEEEE!!! I'll gush more about this in the book comments, but the only problem I have with this story thus far into reading is the first line with the "school widely". I know what you're trying to do, but it just doesn't sound right. I have no alternatives or suggestions, unfortunately, so I leave that up to you if you should agree with me. Correction, I found another little thing worth mentioning (emphasis on little). I would maybe split your first paragraph into two at the point where you have "Anyways..." after the weird family bit. Just seems like a natural break.

September 9, 2013 | D.M. Gergen
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I admire how George is funny, kind, and goes with Lizzie so well. The two would be a favorited couple because they are both similar and have a playful relationship.The first chapter is addicting and it leaves people craving more.

October 28, 2013 | Anastasia N.
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This actually seem quite good, and I think that this can become very well! I like your interpretation of Lizzie, and I like the meeting with George! I hope you will continue because I think this can become quite good. Hoping for more soon :)

November 10, 2013 | Zaineb Afzal


This was delightful! I will readily admit I'm a huge sucker for Pride and Prejudice and have read many of the spin-offs its inspired. You did a really nice job of making this seem believable for a modern world and I hope that you keep it fresh and light. Think Clueless for Emma. I think you have a great start and I'm interested to see what your modern version of Darcy will be. I'll be watching for your next chapter.

September 9, 2013 | D.M. Gergen

Thank you for your wonderful comments! They always make me smile. I'll warn you in advance that it gets a little bit darker in chapter eleven, but it's good for the story. I promise.

September 9, 2013 | Terryn Lewis

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