Status: In Progress
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A group of warriors find out certain agendas planned out by "The Unforgiven" and the changes that will come about the land of Alpha. Will they be able to save their world, before its last cycle?
Created: August 28, 2013 | Updated: September 13, 2013
Genre : Fantasy
Language : English
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I only read the prologue, and have to say that the writing is pretty good. There are few sentences here or there that just didn't read real easy or were formatted a little awkwardly (like the survivor's guilt and having each question in a separate paragraph), but all in all it was decent.September 15, 2013 | D.M. Gergen
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Alright, so this a prologue so I can't really say much about the story just yet. First thing is, the imagery is very nice and your writing is very fluid, which is a huge booster for me- I can't read stories without sufficient imagery. Now, it's fantasy, and I've always just had a buff with it I can't get over and I don't know what it is, but this one doesn't feel as heavy with the magical fairies and stuff. The plot actually seems pretty new, you seem to see the same thing with fantasy stories a lot that you haven't done. I applaud fantasy writers for their world building, but when they take 200 pages explaining the world, well, I don't, but thankfully you didn't do this. There were a few errors, mostly capitalization. I noticed a few times where the beginning of a sentence weren't capitalized or "I" wasn't. Otherwise, good work, and I'll read more soon!September 14, 2013 | A . Nonymous
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Yes, ill be sure to check that :D, thanks for the review, i really appreciate it.September 15, 2013 | F.D. Charles
