Awakening: Prodigy, a Fantasy story | SparkaTale

Sparkatale

Awakening: Prodigy

By: A. V. Dalcourt

Status: In Progress

Summary:

Awakening: Prodigy is a non-romantic dark fantasy novel. A Hunter who has seen the end of the world. A Champion swayed by a promise of power. A Guardian who has lost faith in humanity. Seth Wright knows he's going to die in the Demon War. The squad captain has one year to improve his odds of surviving his mandatory four-year tour. The only tools at his disposal are the Academy's militaryread more

Created: December 19, 2014 | Updated: January 7, 2019

Genre : Fantasy

Language : English

Reviews: 1 | Rating: 1 2 3 4 5

Comments: 12

Favorites: 14

Reads: 13294


Share this:

Reviews (1)


  • Catherine Rose Hillin

    This story is amazing! You are a very talented writer. I love the beginning especially, many of the books on here do not have strong beginnings but yours certainly does. I'm glad I read this. Keep up the good work!

    Rating: 1 2 3 4 5
    January 1, 2015 Flag


Comments / Critiques


    Showing 1-8 of 12 results
    • Chapter: 1 Reply

      The opening drew me in right from the start, instantly making me curious about the young girl, the sole survivor in this whole mess. It also made me very curious as to why these people were being attacked in the first place, what the war was about, and what the ooze (the demons, I assume?)  wanted.

      I wonder what is different about her soul, that made the ooze recoil and die, like that? Iread more

      February 7, 2015 | Shannon Rohrer


    • Reply

      Wow, this has got to be the longest comment I've ever gotten for the first chapter. :P I appreciate your feedback.

      FYI - I have editors lined up for sentence structure, tense, and spelling issues once the book is complete. What you are reading now is the 3rd pass going into the beta stage of the production process. I have used spell check and grammar - but they aren't exactly foolproof.
      read more

      February 7, 2015 | A. V. Dalcourt


    • Reply

      Lol, sorry. ^^; I keep meaning to condense, but there's always so much I want to say about what I'm reading, that I just around away with it. :P

      Ah, that's good then. Sorry for pointing all that out; I wasn't sure, and I wanted to make sure that if you were doing it on your own, you wouldn't have to sift long and hard to find it all. Definitely a good thing you've got people to help you with it;read more

      February 7, 2015 | Shannon Rohrer


    • Reply

      Bugger, that should have said, "I just run away with it". O_O

      February 7, 2015 | Shannon Rohrer


    • Reply

      LOL!

      I don't blame you for pointing out errors like that. I mean, you have no idea what my work process is like, and for the most part, people just put up whatever they just finished writing. 

      My first draft is soooooo not good for public consumption. I'd be amazed if anyone could tell where I was going with anything. I started posting publicly mostly to ensure that i made continuousread more

      February 7, 2015 | A. V. Dalcourt


    • Reply

      *Nods* That's a good way of looking at it. :) It keeps you motivated to continue bettering yourself as a writer.

      And not a problem! ^^ It's my pleasure.

      February 7, 2015 | Shannon Rohrer


    • Chapter: 1 Reply

      As an introduction to your story, I find this chapter very thought-provoking. Although the first section of it seems more like a prologue than part of the actual chapter, it sets the tone of your story nicely.

      Since this book is a dense fantasy story, you also have to worry about things like world-building and magic. Your system all seems extremely well-thought out, but personally, I find theread more

      February 17, 2015 | Liz uli


    • Reply

      Your review of the chapter is very insightful, and it shows promise that other readers will be able to pick up on the subtlies you have. To address a few issues (not defensive like more like FYI like)

      "First part of the chapter reads like a prologue" there's a funny story there. When I was creating sample pieces for my beta's Astral tested poorly, which is a shame because she was planned to beread more

      February 18, 2015 | A. V. Dalcourt


    • Chapter: 13 Reply

      Interesting bit of introspective there; it was a nice, quiet scene, but not boring in the slightest--and it gave a clear impression of the type of person Seth is. Still, I bet there's even more him than what was shown here--more that undoubtedly follows in the next chapters (and since so many are dedicated to him, it's safe to assume he's a major player in this story).

      I look forward toread more

      May 10, 2015 | Shannon Rohrer


    • Chapter: 14 Reply

      Likewise, this too was an interesting chapter, giving more of an impression as to the type of person Seth is, how he thinks, and what he feels.

      But, it also goes further than that, in showing the societal issues they face in this particular world or time period.

      I like the descriptions of the technology; elegant, yet simple, allowing the reader to fill in the blanks with their imagination. :)read more

      May 10, 2015 | Shannon Rohrer


    • Chapter: 15 Reply

      Short, but interesting. Based on what you wrote--about how if he'd been paying attention, he might have realized the town had formed around him--I get the distinct impression he's somehow been thrust into a memory.

      I think the girl with the teddy bear might have been Astral, perhaps from the start of the story. Either way, you've set the foundation well, and it's keeping me on my toes, guessingread more

      May 10, 2015 | Shannon Rohrer


    • Chapter: 16 Reply

      Ah, so he's still on the train; everything from thinking he couldn't fall asleep to now wasn't real; though I still can't help thinking the dream had basis in truth--and that it had to do with Astral's past. Though why he would dream of her without knowing her is intriguing; perhaps he has psychic abilities, and passed by the area where all those terrible things happened--and maybe it was someread more

      May 10, 2015 | Shannon Rohrer