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Created: May 9, 2014 | Updated: November 18, 2014
Genre : Adventure
Language : English
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1: | The Acenti- Chapter 1 | 607 |
2: | The Acenti- Chapter 2 | 774 |
3: | The Acenti- Chapter 3 | 855 |
4: | The Acenti- Chapter 4 | 1264 |
5: | Chapter 5 | 1096 |
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It's a good introduction to your novel. You explain things quite well, though I have virtually no idea what time period this is set in. It says in your blurb that his story takes place after an economic collapse in America...yet humanity seems to have regressed to a tribal state. Where has the modern weaponry gone? Are there no buildings that would prove vastly superior to tents? What exactly opened after the collapse? Did riots ensue? What did the government do in order to fix anything? Perhaps the one thing you're missing is a prologue- something that would give readers a sense of what happened leading up to the story. it needn't be long, UST a brief summary between the disaster and the present day.
At least, that's only my individual opinion - What you have written down was good!
November 18, 2014 | Deleted User
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Also apologies for the bad grammar - I'm writing on my tablet and its keyboard is slightly erratic.
November 18, 2014 | Deleted User