Dragon's Maze, a Fantasy story | SparkaTale

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Dragon's Maze

By: Ki Wright

Status: In Progress

Summary:

When 21 year old Devi Sterling finds the dragon she's been bonded to, her world get's turned upside down. As the war rages on, it is becoming more and more dangerous for dragons and their owners. The enemy have been experimenting illegally on the pairs. One day when Devi is on her way to her job, the town gets invaded by the people they are fighting.

Created: August 8, 2013 | Updated: November 26, 2013

Genre : Fantasy

Language : English

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      Just finished chapter 1. This was a very clean story with really good writing. There were only maybe two typos I caught, but considering that you probably don't have a professional editor I would say that's pretty dang good. I really liked the amount of detail you gave us and how you described Devi and her life, though I would love to know more about the dragons. Obviously this isn't "our" world since she's thinking about dragons as if they are around and real. I'm sure, though, that it will come more in the later chapters. One thing I would watch is that a few paragraphs felt a little choppy. Nothing wrong with them, just a matter of flow. Otherwise very nice work.

      August 26, 2013 | D.M. Gergen


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      Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed the first chapter. You are right, I don't have an editor, I do most of it myself, with some feedback from a few people. I hope to hear more! Any comments or feedback you have is welcome!

      August 26, 2013 | Ki Wright


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      I read the first chapter, your writing was great, its the first time i read something with only like two or three typos/errors :). I can't wait to finish this story!

      September 15, 2013 | F.D. Charles


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      Thank you so much! I'm still in the process of editing and stuff, I hope you enjoy it!

      September 15, 2013 | Ki Wright