When the Moon Descends, a Horror story | SparkaTale

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When the Moon Descends

By: F. M. Mayhem

Status: Completed

Summary:

In its final hours, a city begins to turn on itself. Beasts and madness plague the streets, while the church's warriors attempt to stop the disease from spreading. Experiments run rampant, bystanders are burned by their neighbours, but only when a voice from deep below is heard does true horror descend upon them all.

Created: May 18, 2022 | Updated: March 7, 2024

Genre : Horror

Language : English

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      • Chapter: 1 Reply

        I really enjoyed this! Took a quick glance at work a few days ago and finally have the time to actually sit down and take a proper look of it! Your descriptions are really good and paint a great picture of the world you're creating. There really is a sense of chaos as mobs surround homes, setting denizens alight etc. 

        The multiple POVs were actually pretty surprising, it caught me off guard - in a good way! I had to adjust and learn not to invest too much into one particular character, because they came and went fairly quickly. You do it in a really cool way! Definitely taking notes on that!

        This packed a lot into a single chapter. I'd be interested if stories like this were fleshed out if you ever planned on heading down that route. Well done!

        May 25, 2022 | Danny Power Hallihan (Dormant)


      • Reply

        Hey! Glad to hear you enjoyed it and thanks for the good word! Unfortunately, no plans to expand on this short story, but I think I'll try writing something a little longer in the same style and similar world :D Thanks for reading! Really appreciate the nice comment!

        May 26, 2022 | F. M. Mayhem