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Welcome, to my new and improved profile!
Ongoing, Upcoming, Hiatus & Discontinued Stories (Posting Schedules will be soon) (May not apply to all accounts)
The Curse of King Arthur (Being ReWritten) {The Arthurian Trilogy, Book 1}; Status: Ongoing;Chapter 1-7 rewritten; Chapter 8 coming soon
Into the Inferno (Second Version); Status: Upcoming; Will update when first chapter is posted
Diary of a Speakeasy Pianist; Status: Upcoming; Will update when first chapter is posted
The Chronicles of Rachel Dusk; Status: Upcoming; Will update when first chapter is posted
The Redemption of Lady Guinevere {The Arthurian Trilogy, Book 2}; Status: Hiatus; Will be rewritten and continued, once The Curse of King Arthur is done
Duality; Status: Hiatus; Chapter 1-4 are available to read. No future updates as of this moment.
Into the Inferno (First Version); Status: Discontinued
Soulmarked; Status: Discontinued
Spirit Reborn (First Original story on Fictionpress!); Status: Discontinued
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Reason behind the name change
Do not adjust your dials! Yes, this is still me Petra, or as many of you have known me for the last seven years, Black Rose of Chaos or for those who been around on some of my oldest profiles, Twilight Smash. Yes, I’m finally updating my profile(s), after who knows how long and with a new name!
I’m going to try (emphasis on try) to keep this on point. The decision on changing my username after so long, is just because I’m not the same person from when I first came up with the penname Black Rose of Chaos. When I first started writing my own stories, I wanted a name that was separate from original, fanfiction handle, Twilight Smash (which I still use on fanfiction.net) because I wanted those to be two separate entities and at the time, BRoC felt the perfect handle to use because it can have so many different meanings and I also pay homage to one of my favorite characters from YuGiOh 5Ds, which was ending around the time I thought of the name. Little did I know how much this name would come to mean to me.
As much as I hate changing it, it felt like at this stage in my life, where I want to take my writing to a more professional level and (hopefully) onto publishing, I needed a name that reflects that change. At first, I was planning on deleting these old accounts and starting brand new ones, which I did make. But, when it came time to delete these accounts and all my work from the past five to eight years, I couldn’t do it and I realized why.
This wasn’t the first time I’ve reached this impasse. I’ve been in this same spot before, when I was moving on from fanfictions to my own, original writing. I thought about deleting my fanfiction account, but I couldn’t do it and it’s because, no matter what, those stories and one-shots are all a part of me. It shows my growth from when I was only doing this as a hobby to where I was at that point. It felt like an insult to the readers who cared for those fics and an insult to who I was when I wrote them. And deleting these accounts would feel like the same insult.
So, instead, I decided to just rebrand these accounts. I don’t want to hide away the growth I’ve had in all these years and I want these accounts to still be here, to reflect my past and present selves and so, if I reach another impasse in the next several years, I can come back to the stories and the comments on here and remember this awesome journey.
And, we have reached the end of this (very) lengthy explanation. I know I rambled a lot (it’s a bad habit I have in IRL too), but I just wanted to get it out there, just in case you all were wondering. So, I like to formally introduce you all to the new, Jack Phinney Writes profile. Hope you all come along and enjoy this crazy ride with me!
Until next time! ;)
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Rating:Hey there! I decided to do my comments at every ten chapters, instead of doing one for each chapter since I know getting back to back emails can be a headache. Now, onto the story... I have to say, I'm enjoying so far. I'm loving this world that you created and I like how you combined the cultures of Asia and Europe, to create this world and it's just not influenced but just one culture, but many different ones. As for your characters, I'm going to say straight up, that I really want to punch May's sister and mom. Their personalities just rub me the wrong way, but I do like how you portrayed them. I am enjoying May, though and I do like her. From what I read so far, I can relate to her, personality-wise and I believe that a good amount of girls/young women can relate to her. I'm glad you didn't over-do her reaction to the new world or have her underact towards it either. Overall, I'm enjoying her and can't wait to read more about her. (She also gets an extra like, since she's from my hometown.) I also can't wait to see the backgrounds for characters like Leif and Erik. Mistake-wise, from what I read so far, I haven't found any large grammar mistakes and I've only caught a few minor mistakes. The only things I would say is, watch out for some of the commas in some of your sentences. They break up the sentence a little too much and not necessary in some places. (I do the same thing too and it's hard to break out of doing.) The only other thing I would say, is just watch out when using someone title. I noticed that once in a while, someone title was in lowercase when it should have been in uppercase. Other then that, everything seems good. I'm loving the story so far and I can't wait to dive into more of it. Great Job!
Reviewed on: February 1, 2014
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Lol, Baltar is like that uncle or grandfather, who just says whatever on his mind, with no filter whatsoever. He's becoming on of my favorite characters.
I'm glad you had the chapter with the Laismaran children. I know in previous chapters, its been expressed that humans and Laismaran, hate each other, but it's another thing to see it in action. I'm starting to see why Aedain wants to go with his plan. I like that you also showed Aedain softer side then too. It's a side we haven't had a real chance to see yet.
I really can't wait to see how all this is going to play out in the end. I did notice some small things in the chapters, just some words omitted here and there and some tiny grammar mistakes.
All in all, really great set of chapters and I can't wait to see what happens next!
Commented on: February 6, 2014
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The Curse of King Arthur (Being Rewritten)
Hey, sorry I'm just getting back to you. Some personal problems on my end, but I'm back.
I'm glad you enjoyed the story so far and thanks so much for reviews and advice. And trust me, your critique was nowhere near bitchy. I have seen, read and heard bitchy, trust me, nowhere near that.
I'm taking your advice to heart and I promise, I have some surprises around the corner in the story.
Thanks again!
Commented on: February 6, 2014
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Looks like the 'unfriendly' visitor, has reared it's ugly head. That's has to be an embarrassing situation.
This was a nice filler chapter. It was good to get inside May's head a little more and get to see some more of the human village. It's also a pleasure to see Aedain softer side.
I do have a question though; I noticed that in the middle, a couple of your paragraphs are left aligned and not indented, I was wondering if it was meant to be that way or not? The only other thing I would point out is at the end, when May and Aedain are speaking. The last set of dialogue isn't spaced between each other. Other then that, it was a good chapter. Good Job!
(P.S. I'm still going to review the last couple of chapters before this, just wanted to do this one first since it was right there.)
Commented on: February 4, 2014
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Well...looks like my theory about Abrran, was wrong. May he rest in peace. I like that these last couple of chapters gave us a chance to know Aedain and Baltzar (Sorry if I misspelled their names, I have to do this on my cell phone at the moment), and what's going on elsewhere, which is the beauty of a third person POV. I can see how the prologue is now connecting in with the story. Zhawn seems like an instigator and I have a feeling he's going to cause some more trouble, especially for our group. I have a feeling that something going to happen between May and Aedain, but what that'll be, I don't know yet. Good set of chapters.
Commented on: February 3, 2014
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Looks like things are getting even more interesting now. I'm liking how the story is going and my curiosity is getting more and more peaked as I read on. I can't wait to see what happens next. I figured that there was something more to Erik, then what meet the eye but I wouldn't have guessed him being part demon. And it looks like there's even more to him. I don't know why, but something rubs me the wrong way about Maewyn fiancee, Abrran. I just have a feeling that he has an ulterior motive. I have a feeling that there's more that meet the eye to the demons too andnI'm curious what their plan for Erik is. Overall, this has been a great set of chapters and I can't wait for more.
Commented on: February 2, 2014