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I'm a fictionpress writer, I'm also at
fictionpress.com/~alorzen
​and
fanfiction.com/~alorzen
though I won't often use the second one.
Inkitt:
http://www.inkitt.com/Alorzen
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Rating:A single sentence is enough to describe what was written: simple yet complex, and understandable all the same.
Reviewed on: August 6, 2015
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I was practically choking with laughter after the first (second) chapter, and although a fair amount of it actually came from what you wrote (it was awesome), most of it came from Princess Alara.
You see, I am a fan of Magic: the Gathering, and there's a place (a dimension) called Alara in it.
But then I searched the internet:
Bing: https://www.bing.com/search?q=Alara&qs=n&form=QBRE&pq=alara&sc=9-5&sp=-1&sk=&cvid=6cbf92d77a814e058702f6f32fbcea4b
Google: https://www.google.com/?gws_rd=ssl#q=Alara
Wikipedia: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Alara
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It seems not everything goes as planned. You named a princess either for a medical acronym regarding radiation or an in-game expansion. Now, whenever I read about Princess Alara, I feel the strange urge to laugh, for I always think "As Low As Reasonably Achieveable."
This doesn't detract from the story, though. I liked the two chapters that I read, and I hope you don't give up on this story (as I have done way too many times in the past).
Keep writing. Please.
Commented on: August 6, 2015