Sparkatale

Hi there. I'm finally reviewing, I'm so sorry that it took so long. Ok, so far I'm enjoying your story and I really do like it. First off, until about half way through this chapter did I realize that Chris was a girl. (Honestly I thought it was a guy.) So, the way you use dialogue sometime you forget, I assume forget, ""'s. It is really confusing as I'm reading. The use of curse words is over done and just aggravating. Authors who use curse words often over use them   . Oh, a teacher cannot curse at a student by law. It would be really hard for a teacher to curse  in a normal school, even harder in such a strict school.  The references to pop culture and tv, games, shows is starting to get on my nerves. To be honest, I've never read a story that's been published with so many references. I feel like you are putting to much of yourself into this. Like Chris the character. She seems too fake. Ahh the classic who's she going to end up with. 

Hi there. I'm finally reviewing, I'm so sorry that it took so long. Ok, so far I'm enjoying your story and I really do like it. First off, until about half way through this chapter did I realize that Chris was a girl. (Honestly I thought it was a guy.) So, the way you use dialogue sometime you forget, I assume forget, ""'s. It is really confusing as I'm reading. The use of curse words is over done and just aggravating. Authors who use curse words often over use them   . Oh, a teacher cannot curse at a student by law. It would be really hard for a teacher to curse  in a normal school, even harder in such a strict school.  The references to pop culture and tv, games, shows is starting to get on my nerves. To be honest, I've never read a story that's been published with so many references. I feel like you are putting to much of yourself into this. Like Chris the character. She seems too fake. 

Hi there. I'm finally reviewing, I'm so sorry that it took so long. Ok, so far I'm enjoying your story and I really do like it. First off, until about half way through this chapter did I realize that Chris was a girl. (Honestly I thought it was a guy.) So, the way you use dialogue sometime you forget, I assume forget, ""'s. It is really confusing as I'm reading. The use of curse words is over done and just aggravating. Authors who use curse words often over use them   . Oh, a teacher cannot curse at a student by law. It would be really hard for a teacher to curse  in a normal school, even harder in such a strict school.