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Hi everyone! I am currently in the long and winding hall call the Revision Process! I have been working on my novel since July 2012 and I am expected to have this manuscript finished by the end of July 2014! PLEASE help me! I have a publishing company expecting my manuscript in August! If you have any title names, that'd be great. Right now it's a toss up between Realms of Jeandi or The War of the Hope Child
Beside my book....I am a broke college kid studying English- Creative Writing and Business Marketing.My hopes for the future include but are not limited to a successful writing career,either as a full time writer or working at a publishing company! An awesome house or apartment with my boyfriend-someday-soon husband and maybe some kids....if not more pets! My long-term education goal is to have 2 B.A's in Creative Writing and Business Marketing and then HOPEFULLY a Master's in Fiction Writing!
I need all the help I can get in the long and winding hall!!
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So sorry! I hadn't realized it was through free-verse poetry! NOW that I understand THAT i feel bad :(
I still think it is really cool and good. I liked it!
Commented on: May 19, 2014
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The Dream
Great start. However, if this is a dream and an introduction to the book, I would consider rephrasing this chapter.
You said "I remember" quite a bit. On one hand, it is a fantastic tool, but there isn't enough meat between the "remembering" thus, they are too close in proximity.
You should bring the reader in closer with these heart stopping memories your main character has by appealing to our sense.
The Wolf part was good, I see what you're trying to do. I think you should add just a teeeeeennnnssy bit more about Wolf so we as readers can get start to feel something about Wolf...otherwise it just feels like a blank word that is supposed to be a person.
On a happier note! Love, love LOVE your sentence structure to have for dramatic effect. :) The clip, short VERY small paragraphs add to the drama that I see you are striving for! GOOD!!! Ooooh add more periods towards the end, before you mention Wolf....that'd be cool.
All in all, great start...looking forward to reading the rest!
Commented on: May 19, 2014