Sparkatale

The story is nice, I wonder how it all evolves. Unlike Tiburon the Shark, I think chapter 2 is written in fitting language, but that's probably just the "personal opinion" territory.

I like the melancholic setting. It's quite refreshing for me because I don't really remember reading anything with that mood for some time.

The only thing that I wasn't sure about was the length of some paragraphs. Sometimes, they seemed a little too long. But that might be just my personal opinion (sometimes utterly wrong) and others might disagree.

Thanks for the comment. And thanks especially for the question. The answer is somewhat complicated though. Regardless, I like constructive criticism and that you gave me something to ponder about.

The story is based on another very loosely. At least the beginning. An evil king sends a servant to bring him a princess to marry. Lots of fairy tales are usually along these lines. Rescue a damsel in distress and marry her. I sort of took it for granted so I completely omitted the mention, but now that I think about correcting it, I realize it's not that simple because of the plot. Still, it's somewhat of a flaw that puzzles me. I guess I'll have to reread it thoroughly and see how it all ties in.

I like how you started out with action straight at the beginning. No fuss around it. Stories solely about action are few and far between I think.