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Nothing much, really. You've stumbled upon the profile of a randomly randomized writer who writes random stuff.
Actually, it's speculative fiction. Fantasy, sci-fi, horror, thriller, mystery, slipstream, surreal... or everything combined.
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The story is nice, I wonder how it all evolves. Unlike Tiburon the Shark, I think chapter 2 is written in fitting language, but that's probably just the "personal opinion" territory.
I like the melancholic setting. It's quite refreshing for me because I don't really remember reading anything with that mood for some time.
The only thing that I wasn't sure about was the length of some paragraphs. Sometimes, they seemed a little too long. But that might be just my personal opinion (sometimes utterly wrong) and others might disagree.
Commented on: February 9, 2014
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Thanks for the comment. And thanks especially for the question. The answer is somewhat complicated though. Regardless, I like constructive criticism and that you gave me something to ponder about.
The story is based on another very loosely. At least the beginning. An evil king sends a servant to bring him a princess to marry. Lots of fairy tales are usually along these lines. Rescue a damsel in distress and marry her. I sort of took it for granted so I completely omitted the mention, but now that I think about correcting it, I realize it's not that simple because of the plot. Still, it's somewhat of a flaw that puzzles me. I guess I'll have to reread it thoroughly and see how it all ties in.
Commented on: February 9, 2014
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I like how you started out with action straight at the beginning. No fuss around it. Stories solely about action are few and far between I think.
Commented on: February 9, 2014