Sparkatale

I wrote this short story in poem form; I have posted it on Figment, FictionPress and here, Spark A Tale. I would like more feed back on it; the first time I wrote A Woman's Adventured, I started the poem with... Maiden, Mother, Crone At first it was doing well; then I was told that Crone was not a good word, so I changed Crone to Matriarch and it flows better. I know in the New Age/Pagan Religion; Maiden, Mother and Crone is accepted. But I wanted it to be different and still have the Triple Goddess as the main character; I hope I got some interests. It would be nice to have a Review or Comment or even both...