Sparkatale

Hello, I am a new author on this site who is looking for a chance to improve my story writing skills. I am more known on another site (FictionPress.net), but I can't seem to get reviews for my stories. So I ask of you all, please read a bit of my story and give me an idea of how I'm doing so far. Though I already have a grand plan for the whole story, I will try and make small changes to it with your reviews. Thank you for taking the time to listen to my request.