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Seeking comments and critiques
I just posted my WIP, The Lay of Paul Twister over in the Fantasy section. It's a story about a young man from modern Earth who has somehow been abducted to a magical world, and found that he has the rather unique ability to disrupt and warp magic. And while he's trying to make some sort of comfortable life for himself--and discovering that using modern knowledge profitably in a pre-technological society is nowhere near as easy as the stories he's read would make it out to be--powerful people seem to have their eye on him and his powers... I've got 14 chapters done so far, and the story's about halfway done. I'd really appreciate some reviews and critiques, to help me see what I'm doing well and what can be improved. Thanks all!
by Anthony Peers | Sep 29th 2013, 13:14
I'm currently on chapter 11 and very much enjoying this. the main problems I see are small such as typos or lack of explanations. a bit more on the angel michael and on what Omne vivum ex vivo(I had to look it up) would be nice for example. and maybe longer chapters? not that I'm one to talk with my chapter lengths >.< but I've noticed that longer chapters (but not too long, otherwise chapters are unneeded really) tend to be a sign of more writing experience. reading the Eragon series for example you can see his chapters and writing skills grow clearly thanks to how early he started.
ReplyOmar Scriven | October 2, 2013
If the "the angel Michael" bit confuses you, look up the name she used in conjunction with it and it'll make more sense... ;) I do that sometimes. I'll throw in little things that the reader has to think about a little before they get it, because it makes it more fun when the light bulb comes on. As for chapter lengths, I basically just try to go with what works well for me. And yeah, some authors write really big chapters. Others don't, and for some, it varies. Have a look at The Wheel of Time: sometimes Robert Jordan would write a chapter that was 80 pages long, and then a couple chapters later it would be half a page. I think it's more of a stylistic issue than anything. I'm glad you enjoyed it so far. I'll keep working on the story. I figure at this point I'm right around the halfway mark somewhere.
ReplyAnthony Peers | October 2, 2013
it's no good if I have to actually look it up to understand '>.> it cuts into the reading.
ReplyOmar Scriven | October 2, 2013
can't remember what it was but there was a reference I couldn't find when I looked it up... but more importantly, I WANT MOAR!!!!!
ReplyOmar Scriven | October 20, 2013
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