Status: Completed
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Created: November 15, 2013 | Updated: February 2, 2015
Genre : Fantasy
Language : English
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| 1: | Meet Adiscordia and Grizelda | 4542 |
| 2: | #2 Adiscordia’s new plan and baby Nicholas | 2540 |
| 3: | #3 Adiscordia loses herself | 803 |
| 4: | #4 Hansel and Gretel | 3514 |
| 5: | The smell of Gingerbread | 1129 |
| 6: | Chapter six | 3892 |
| 7: | Escape! | 1690 |
| 8: | New Grizelda | 1099 |
| 9: | Castles | 3200 |
| 10: | The Ball | 1639 |
| 11: | Heading Home | 1404 |
| 12: | My Beginning | 4220 |
| 13: | Chapter 13 | 2008 |
| 14: | Lost! Dreams | 2047 |
| 15: | Two pigs (Oink!) | 1675 |
| 16: | Nicholas's truth | 2383 |
| 17: | Chapter 17 | 685 |
| 18: | Chapter 18 | 993 |
| 19: | Chapter 19 | 1271 |
| 20: | epilouge | 180 |
| 21: | error | 0 |
| Total Wordcount: | 40914 |
Reviews (1)
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If you like the old origanal and dark fairytales this is the story for you.
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December 10, 2013 Flag
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I really think you should work on your summary. The one you have is way too vague.
December 6, 2013 | Heather O'toole /Davies
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I like the concept of your story although it is a little darker than what I normally read. You really capture the old fairytale writing style.
The flow of the first couple paragraphs was a little choppy but the flow smoothed out as the story progressed. I think you should separate some of the bigger paragraphs into smaller ones to make them easier to read.
December 6, 2013 | Heather O'toole /Davies