Ballad of Wind and Flowers, a Fantasy story | SparkaTale

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Ballad of Wind and Flowers

By: Bunnit B.

Status: In Progress

Summary:

There's a legend of an elf, a "sleeping beauty," whose presence brings good fortune and fertile soil to the land. For nearly a century he remained undisturbed in his slumber and locked away from sight. Then appeared Liya Barashia who infiltrated the king's castle in search of this elf to wake him up and save him from the enemy kingdom only to discover he never wanted to be saved...

Created: September 25, 2013 | Updated: October 12, 2013

Genre : Fantasy

Language : English

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1: Chapter 1 4093
2: Chapter 2 3799
3: Chapter 3 3257
Total Wordcount: 11149

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      This was really good! Characters are the most important part of a story for me, and I think your characters are really interesting and well rounded. The only thing I can really critque is that sometimes you switched between third and first person, I think it was meant to be Liya's thoughts but it would be easier if you put them in italics or something so it's easier to read. I found when I pasted my stories on here from word the italics I had just disappeared lol and I had to go back and add them in, so maybe this is what happened to you. Anyway thats the only major editing thing I can think of aside from a few typos, and I'm looking forward to the rest!

      October 11, 2013 | Genevieve Middleton


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      Thank you very much for pointing out the missing italics! I would not have noticed myself otherwise. I really appreciate your comment on the characters since they are the ones I am focusing on the most and I'm just glad you enjoyed what I have so far. Thanks!

      October 18, 2013 | Bunnit B.