Sparkatale

An excellent start. I cannot wait to read more. Nice work.

Thank you. ^v^

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Using was seems isn't appropriate for this story.
Nervously waiting for the news of his wife’s delivery, Michael Harmony paced back and front of the hospital door.

You don't need to switch from plain third-person view to third-person limited for this story. Error: [She listened and tried and tried but soon her vision got blurry and spotty.] Just write how she had struggles as what you've seen with your eyes, I guess.

Starting a good chapter is based from how many pages you'd already written, and how epic your work is. So, it's kind of rearranging. 

Slice of life genre has their own flavor. So you've started it just fine. 

-Hearm Jan

It's very short, but I liked the chapter as a whole. Plenty of movement in only a few hundred words, and you were able to capture the stress of the father, the pain of the mother, and the sense of excitement of the twins being born rather well.

My only other critique would be the very first line, it should be 'It was a cold night.'

So a good start, but try and make your chapters a bit longer.