Sparkatale

After reading chapter one, I realized that I love your description of hell so far, haha. The molten river does have a sense of beauty in it. Though, where did that guy get the smokes? Seems like it would be hard to find one of the afterlife... Anyways! I think I'm gonna continue this, as it seems to have an interesting concept, and the mystery in your story so far makes me wonder what's going to happen next. Though, one thing I would like to point out, is that maybe you could add in a little bit of emotion. Is Leah scared? Does she recognize the guy, and is that why she could talk to him so easily and believe him? Other than that, this was truly brilliant. You've got yourself a follower!

Thanks for reading!