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Eight Hundred and Forty Nine Days Ago

By: Niek Morenta

Status: Completed

Summary:

Eight hundred and forty nine days ago, my Dad took me Leopold's on Broughton. We sat in our normal, metal, rocket ship chairs, talked about the number of shops we passed, how many cars had their windows rolled down, and about the universe. Just like every Thursday evening, I had Honey Almond & Butter cream and he had... a heart attack, a heart attack, a heart attack.

Created: September 3, 2013 | Updated: September 21, 2013

Genre : Tragedy

Language : English

Reviews: 2 | Rating:

Comments: 2

Favorites: 1

Reads: 676


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Reviews (2)


  • debbie bisson

    Oh i can relate to your pain and passion! unrequited love sucks!

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    August 18, 2014 Flag


  • D.M. Gergen

    There were a few errors that kept this from getting five stars, but if you want to read a VERY good story this is one. From the narration of a child with OCD symptoms to parents trying to live normal lives with those children, it was probably one of the best things I have read. Then follow it up withe closing line...just brilliant. This is one of my favorite things I have probably read on this site thus far.

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    October 8, 2013 Flag


Comments / Critiques


    • Chapter: 1 Reply

      Wow, you had me hooked from the start! I especially enjoyed the repeated sentences; it gave the character a recognizable quirk. Nice work!

      September 19, 2013 | Jessica Greene


    • Reply

      I'm so glad you liked it!

      September 20, 2013 | Niek Morenta