Status: Completed
Summary:
This is a sort of "metaphysical" story dating from when "transcendental meditation" was all the rage. It's a sort of introspective examination of the feelings engendered by the sightings of a particular girl. Sounds weird, but isn't really. It's just, well...musings, as a story.
Created: September 2, 2013 | Updated: September 2, 2013
Genre : Romance
Language : English
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I've been going back and forth on reading this one, but I finally clicked on the story and I'm glad I did. This story, although choppy in the beginning and at times in need of some minor editing, created a very bleak yet intriguing picture of marriage and relationships. The writing style was creative and the characters wonderfully drawn despite it being a short story. Although i wouldn't necessarily categorize this as a romance in the typical sense, it does a nice job of looking at a different aspect of relationships than stories of the Danielle Steele variety.
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October 8, 2013 Flag
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Watch your commas. There are a few places where you have quite a few unnecessary ones. The second paragraph for example.
October 8, 2013 | D.M. Gergen