Sparkatale

Punctuation is awkward.  Check out Eats Shoots and Leaves by Lynne Truss, or Woe is I.  The Transitive Vampire is also an excellent book on grammar and punctuation.  The text needs a lot of work, but the story line is fine.  Good luck editing. 

Hello , thank you so much for commenting , i dont know what pronunciations you mean , can you be clearer please ?

No, I wasn't commenting on the pronunciations.  I never studied phonics at school --I'm a Navy Brat and went to 8 different elementary schools and always missed phonics-- I do the word recognition method because that's all I know. I don't pronounce at all while I'm reading.  I may, however, rely more than other readers on punctuation to guide me through the text. 

This text, as I said, has very erratic punctuation.  There are run-on sentences where two sentences are jammed together and commas inserted or omitted.  I suggest you stop putting quotation marks around non-dialogue words, like:  "Heit" and so forth.

Do give The Transitive Vampire a look.  It offers excellent and amusing examples of correct grammar.  Eats Shoots and Leaves  is useful for intelligent punctuation. 

thank yo so much for the help ,i really appreciate it 

Hello man , thank you so much , if you have some free time on your hands can you please check my story TEARS OF THE SKY and tell me what do you think of the content ? not the punctuation , just the story and the plot so far ? id be thankful 

Amazing imagination from an amazing writer <3 .
What a great talent you have, keep going and keep writing. I'm sure that I'll read your name on TV one day ^.^ . 
I am waiting for the rest of the book...

Thank you so much for aying that my dear ^_^ , it really means alot hearing it from you