Sparkatale

You certainly seem to have found your style. Grouping these particular stories together created a nice over-arcing feeling that really enhanced the writing with its whole being greater than the sum of all its parts.

These are excellent examples of flash fiction, conflict resolution is kept to scale and after reading it through you understand the feeling or emotion you, the writer, are trying to convey to us, the readers.

You have a strong, and capable, style of writing. My one critique is you occasionally use either dry or clique similes/metaphors that can be a little off-putting. Try turning your language into something as truly independent as your overall style of conveying theme, setting, characters, and message.

First of your work I've read, and am curious how you would round and flesh characters in slightly longer pieces. Perhaps I'll comment on another piece soon!

Starts off a bit shaky, but ends fantastic. I usually abhor hero stories, but this ended up well done. Props for not succumbing to the ever tiring "time slowed and I could see everything" line, a hero's power draws us in but flaws and weakness makes them believable, interesting, dynamic, and something that makes the reader think. Keep up the good work, you got at least one fan here!

I agree the "time slowed and I could see everything" thing is rather bad. It was one of the first things I thought about when I got to that part when I was writing. It is definitely true what you said about a hero's power and their weaknesses.

 

 

Good, but as warned in authors notes very pulp writing. It feels like a much more involved narration, the emotion of the moment does come through and with some polishing it can really shine through. I love reading this really pulp work where authors are feeling out new techniques to see where they feel comfortable. My editors itch really kicked in on this one, shame I can't use my blue editing pen to mark up a hard copy hah. To be honest, I think I've always been better at editing than writing! C'est la vi. Reminds of a piece I did years ago, I'll have to look through archives and post it to try and help give you ideas. On my mobile though, so that will haveto wait.