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The House Next Door

By: Miheal Larson 3rd

Status: In Progress

Summary:

A sunny morning. A dark and mysterious house. A new neighbor. A deadly path.... All was well when Anne moved in next to Billy, but then he started to discover the mystery behind the house. The story of two lovers separated by something deeper than death itself. And now it is up to Billy to figure out what has been left behind, before he and Anne end up the next victims of, The House Next Door.

Created: December 8, 2013 | Updated: December 17, 2013

Genre : Mystery

Language : English

Reviews: 1 | Rating:

Comments: 1

Favorites: 2

Reads: 2270

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1: Chapter One 2399
2: Chapter Two 1323
3: Chapter Three 1248
4: Chapter Four 1072
5: Chapter Five 1601
6: Chapter Six 2297
Total Wordcount: 9940

Reviews (1)

  • Heather O'toole /Davies

    This starts off farlly well, I think there is room for improvement. On a positive note I can tell that you have your own story here, and I don't feel like I am reading something I have read before.

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    This book needs a summery to lure people to it. I would also like to know more about where this story is headed.

     

    Also you should really think about breaking up your huge paragraphs.  They are huge and imitating!

    Over all the first chapter is well written and has a cool ending with the rats but I wonder where they went in the second chapter. It has me confused. I'm not sure if there is enough here to keep the average reader reading more.

    December 9, 2013 | Heather O'toole /Davies