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Sapphire Blood and Crimson Tears

By: Felicity Cresting

Status: In Progress

Summary:

People who can control the Pearl in their blood can gain a Gift that gives them extraordinary abilities. Serafina Valley has a Gift that hasn't surfaced in over two centuries, a powerful Gift. However, she pushes away her Gift, only knowing it to cause pain and suffering. Now, six years later, Sera and her sister, Lidiya, have joined the Ark Hunting Association, determined to find their missing mother at any costs. But with the growing struggles of war, the strange activity of Arks, the suspicious movements within the government, and a mysterious man called "Master" after them, they begin to wonder if finding their mother is even possible.

Created: November 9, 2013 | Updated: January 18, 2014

Genre : Fantasy

Language : English

Reviews: 1 | Rating:

Comments: 4

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Reviews (1)

  • Ayumi Kokoriku

    Is the cover Sera by any chance? Just wondering. Already stated what I'd like improved, so aside from that, it was an enjoyable read.

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    November 10, 2013 Flag

Comments / Critiques

    • Chapter: 1 Reply

      OK, it's just the prologue, but I am already loving this story. It's wondefully written; the descriptions are perfect and the emotions very realistic.

      November 10, 2013 | Ayumi Kokoriku

    • Chapter: 2 Reply

      The first chapter did not fail to impress. I enjoyed Lydia and Sera's characters, and their sisterly way with each other is very endearing. Could you elaborate more on Lydia's Gift? What exactly is a Shadow Knight?

      November 10, 2013 | Ayumi Kokoriku

    • Chapter: 3 Reply

      Sorry if I'm getting annoying but I have a tendency to review all the chapters of a story I read.

      Anyway, excellent read. Matt sounds kind and serious; he would be perfect for Sera! (Just a suggestion >.<) 

      Also, I'd like to suggest you invest a few more chapters with some explanations.

      Long explanations regarding the customs of your story world makes things more interesting and helps the reader understand the story and characters better. You could elaborate more on a few things; the Council, the war, Pearls, Gifts, etc. 

      I was a little confused by the second half of the chapter, where there were many mentions of Gifts and Pearls. It would help if you mentioned what 'Gift of the Shifter' or 'Gift of the Spirits' meant.

       

      November 10, 2013 | Ayumi Kokoriku

    • Chapter: 4 Reply

      Again, I adore the sisterly love between Lydia and Sera. I didn't expect Sera to actually punch Matt, and break his nose, but it was sweet, in its own way. Why was his blood purple? Does it have something to do with his Pearl?

      Feli seems to be a turning point in the story; an Ark who can resist Lydia's Gift. But why was Lydia exhausted? Why didn't Sera use her Gift or shoot Feli?

      Still a little confused, but this chapter was pretty good. There were a few mistakes here and there, which puzzled me for a few minutes. 

      Update soon! :)

       

       

      November 10, 2013 | Ayumi Kokoriku