Sparkatale

Just finished chapter 1. This was a very clean story with really good writing. There were only maybe two typos I caught, but considering that you probably don't have a professional editor I would say that's pretty dang good. I really liked the amount of detail you gave us and how you described Devi and her life, though I would love to know more about the dragons. Obviously this isn't "our" world since she's thinking about dragons as if they are around and real. I'm sure, though, that it will come more in the later chapters. One thing I would watch is that a few paragraphs felt a little choppy. Nothing wrong with them, just a matter of flow. Otherwise very nice work.

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed the first chapter. You are right, I don't have an editor, I do most of it myself, with some feedback from a few people. I hope to hear more! Any comments or feedback you have is welcome!

I read the first chapter, your writing was great, its the first time i read something with only like two or three typos/errors :). I can't wait to finish this story!

Thank you so much! I'm still in the process of editing and stuff, I hope you enjoy it!