Status: Completed
Summary:
A peaceful and serene village in the daylight turns into the hunting ground for the Beast in the moonlight.
Created: May 15, 2015 | Updated: May 17, 2015
Genre : Fantasy
Language : English
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So the writing in this was very choppy and sort of abrupt. It was also kind of childish. I don't know if the childishness is the style it's meant to written in or not. It could have benefitted with some more description and few added scenes to make the story flow better. Also maybe like the decription of the Beast Tamer, you could probably put it when we now meet him. Also a blue moon does not happen one night after the other. It happens further apart than that, like about a week apart. In regard to Argent's gun, silver is too soft to make a gun out of. Silver bullets are likewise impractical. As far as I know, werewolves generally have some sort of enhanced healing, yours could not, but I still think they would survive a jump off the cliff. I find it a little hard to think they would jump off the cliff however. You also decribed your werewolves as standing on two feet, but then went on to say it was seven feet tall and nine feet long, and I can't understand how that works out if the werewolf stands upright. If it goes on four legs though, and I missed that, then it would work. I hope this helps.
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May 28, 2015 Flag