Sparkatale

Oh goodness, that made for an interesting read. In the beginning I had been laughing at their antics. Their friendship is so adorable, I really loved the aspect of the story. Near the end though.. it took such a turn I hadn't seen coming. Even though those things do tend to happen in real life, the way you portrayed it was very dark. I'm not going to write what is was, as I don't want to spoil it for other readers, but it was really, really good! That said, I did notice a bit of waning in your tenses. In one line you would write the narrative in present tense, and the next would be past. As well as one mix up in homonyms. Just one though, so it's not a terrible thing. I believe the word you used was hall, what I think you were trying to write was haul. Besides that, I really did enjoy this. I'll add it to my favourites. :)