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Created: December 24, 2013 | Updated: December 24, 2013
Genre : Supernatural
Language : English
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Chapter One
Wow, what an intriguing and thrilling first chapter! I like the premise of this very much, and your writing is fantastic. With such descriptive and visual writing I had no problems becoming fully immersed in the story, which evolved at a nice pace with revealing bits of Helm and Arcadia before jumping into that exciting conclusion that has left me wanting more.
Helm has certainly found himself in a fascinating new school. Arcadia definitely has wonders and secrets, and the Celestial Program seems to be at the forefront of all that intrigue.
Serena was a compelling character the moment she appeared, but the unexpected events that transpired in Helm's dorm room have left me utterly amazed by her, not to mention the teasing bits of info Helm discovered while hacking.
Great storytelling!
December 26, 2013 | Moonvibe 34