Sparkatale

I've spotted quite a few typos. To help you out, there's this sentence somewhere at the beginning that uses "meet" when I think you meant "met"; near the ending when she saw Brad kissing Amy, you used "their" when I think you meant "there". Then there's this sentence: "Though, it is not spot I had ever been before." I think you didn't notice the lack of "a". I would recommend you proof read this chapter, perhaps ask a friend to read over you work? I know that sometimes it's easy to miss because as the writers, we know what word we want next, so we might easily place in those words though they aren't written on the document. If you don't want a friend to read though, then I suggest you give yourself maybe a few hours break from the document before going back to it and read it from the top - it should be easier to spot mistakes by then.

That aside, I like how as a child, she was already aware of how people were treating her and her mother. Some people would generally tend to ignore these things, as far as I know anyway. She knows herself - that's she's changed and she knew why she did. This is a pretty good intro to this story.