Status: In Progress
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Created: December 2, 2013 | Updated: July 11, 2014
Genre : Romance
Language : English
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1: | An Introduction | 888 |
2: | Chapter 2 | 688 |
3: | Chapter 3 | 1249 |
4: | Chapter 4 | 874 |
5: | Chapter 5 | 1256 |
6: | Chapter 6 | 897 |
7: | Chapter 7 | 691 |
8: | Chapter 8 | 787 |
9: | Chapter 9 | 758 |
10: | Chapter 10 | 1067 |
11: | Chapter 11 | 865 |
12: | Chapter 12 | 1161 |
13: | Trishapocalypse | 710 |
14: | Chapter 14 | 932 |
15: | Chapter 15 | 866 |
16: | Chapter 16 | 1328 |
17: | Chapter 17 | 911 |
18: | Chapter 18 | 1139 |
19: | Chapter 19 | 1265 |
20: | Chapter 20 | 1352 |
21: | Chapter 21 | 837 |
22: | Chapter 22 | 962 |
23: | Chapter 23 | 1025 |
24: | Chapter 24 | 1021 |
25: | Chapter 25 | 907 |
26: | Chapter 26 | 1060 |
27: | Chapter 27 | 813 |
28: | Chapter 28 | 1041 |
29: | Chapter 29 | 1073 |
Total Wordcount: | 28423 |
Reviews (3)
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I have to say, this is a great story, keep it up!!! Though it is a shame it doesn't get more attention...
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December 8, 2013 Flag
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I think this is a very good story. The characters are interesting and well-structured, as is the main story itself. I like how quite a lot of the plots intertwine or connect, and how (somewhat like a TV series) a lot of the separate chapters are two or three parted stories with an underlying theme throughout the whole story.
I do have some points, however.
1). Perhaps a little more description on the characters' pasts? Just a personal thought, but I would really like to know more about quite a few of them, even if they are more minor characters. I am aware that this is structured like a diary or a blog, but it's just something you may want to take into account.
2). You have an excellent writing style, however, I would like to see a bit more description. Not just in the topic of the characters' pasts, but in the surroundings as well and perhaps even a little more about Casey's feelings. Perhaps more about what the school itself is like or more on their teachers? Just a thought.
Apart from these two comments, which I am aware are both to do with description, as I think there is a little too much dialogue sometimes, it is an intriguing tale and I think you have an excellent writing style!Rating:
December 3, 2013 Flag
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Just in general - I feel like the entire story is just a wall of text. I'm trying my best to read through it, but if you spaced them out - perhaps a new line every time someone speaks, it would look much more presentable, and more people would be attracted to the story?
Just a suggestion, your story is good otherwise.November 13, 2014 | Deleted User
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Chapter: 8 Reply
I'm really enjoying this so far. I can't read much more today, but I think tomorrow I can and I'm really looking forwards to it! Please continue writing!
December 3, 2013 | Lyssandra Blossom
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Chapter: 8 Reply
I really like this chapter because this is where you start to develop on the characters' appearances more, which I think is something really important to have in a story.
December 8, 2013 | Miranda Herr
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Chapter: 24 Reply
I think this is a really good opening and I really love it! Pleeeeeeeeeease write more <3 <3 <3
December 8, 2013 | Miranda Herr