Sparkatale

First of all, the story is very well written. Besides minor mistakes there are no plot inconsistencies. There are plenty of mystery and action as to not bore the reader. The story pulls in and keeps the reader hooked until the end. In addition, it is my opinion that the way vampires are portrayed and behave is appropriate and understandable. I am aware that it is somewhat ‘fashionable’ to stand against vampire stories in the past few years due to their fans being mostly teenage girls that romanticize the creatures; however, I would like to applaud you for making this quite different than all the vampire fiction. It is dark, somewhat twisted, quite realistic and, as a result, incredible. Finally, I admire your abilities to breathe life into each and every character. Your creations are neither too perfect nor terrible, thus their personalities are just as interesting and unique. I thank you for sharing your work and I wish you the best.

Although it is only a sprout of your story, up to this point it is very greatly written. The dream was a wonderful way to intrigue the reader even further. I truly enjoyed reading it and plan on patiently waiting for the continuation. Good luck. :)