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I want to become an author one day and have my books published in the many languages I can only hope to learn. So please, be my friend and help me by critiquing and commenting on my stories.
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I really like this- it has a lot of potential. I was a little bit confused, you have given the reader a heap of information, but there is no substantial place to store it for later use- kinda like when you write something up on your computer and forget to save it, causing the computer to lose it. I would have liked to see Twilight Falls at the start, so I have an idea of where she has grown up and what I should be seeing. Other wise I love it!! Keep going, please!!!!
Commented on: August 29, 2013
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Thank you so much for reviewing all of my chapters! I will certainly keep your comments in mind when I get around to re-writing it. Thank you!!
Commented on: August 25, 2013
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This story is really engaging. It seemed real to me, and it was vague, so I'm hoping you will elaborate as the chapters progress onward. The description were really good- especially that of the Reaper, I can see it perfectly in my mind. One problem though, I'm not sure if it's a glitch or not, but after the lines; [“Is that an OK?†“Yes.â€] it goes back to the lines [We headed back to the shrine after Colonel Wood ordered the other travellers to “be on the lookout.†For the next little while we walked in silence. I instinctively looked for my landmarks, remembering what my brothers had told me.] and repeats the story from there. Otherwise, it is great and has potential, keep going.
Commented on: August 24, 2013
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This was good, I like the plot and the ideas are great. I got a bit confused in some places, but I worked it out eventually. I like this story- good job
Commented on: August 24, 2013