Sparkatale

The book was very well written. Punctuation, spelling, and use of words where well put together and made sense. The stories progression was pretty smooth and easy to read. Though, some of the names could confuse people a bit and the way the characters were in a sense a bit rough around the edges but well portrayed over all. The style of writing was a bit mechanical in the way it was gone about, but likable none the less. The story could use a bit more detail, like describing the places the characters in the book are visiting the first time so that the reader gets an idea of what the surrounding area looks like. Like the wind blowing, the things that the characters find around them, the sights and sounds of that room or area and etc. The book has a lot going for it and it's obvious that you are a very talented writer, but there are always things we can do to improve. The book is off the a great start and I hope that you continue to write and improve, maybe even maybe becoming a writer professionally. Well I hope that the comment helped. I'm only a greenhorn and don't know too much about writing and structure. But I hope some of the stuff I said made sense. Best of luck.