Sparkatale

I really love this! I can honestly say I had nothing I wanted to do at the moment, so I decided to browse poetry - I'm very happy with what I've found. This honestly speaks to me; I'm not quite that old that I can look back on my childhood (it's not over for me just yet) but I feel that I would smile as well on looking back at my dreams, with no regret.

Really confusing as in too confusing? I'd rather not have to change how I'm writing the chapters, but if it gets too horribly confusing, I may consider it?

Right, yes. I'd still like to do that, and we can do comments then, sounds good. 
 

I really appreciate that, thank you. (I can't seem to stress my thanks enough, honestly!)

Things will be cleared up about Porfiro in a coming chapter-- the next Tide chapter or so to be exact. I skip around a lot with the Kingdoms, hopefully that doesn't make things too confusing?

I have 15, 16 chapters with the prologue, but I obviously haven't posted that far yet. You don't have to review every chapter for me either, though I do really appreciate it if you decide to. =P 
Do you mean for yours? You probably do, I'm sorry it's late right now. I'll certainly do a few reviews still, if you'll allow that? 
I've kind of just been commenting on yours actually, though I can scrape up a few reviews if you want. :)

Ah, should I explain that better? The Wraith Kingdom is the 'Shadow' Kingdom, basically barren from the beginning. It's usually cold, and the trees seem dead and dried out in some places. People do live there, i.e. centaurs, but it isn't the best place from the beginning. The Corrupt Ones took it over quickly because of its already 'corrupt' or 'dead' atmosphere. 

Thank you so much though, I'm glad you like it! 
I think I will fix the cyborg's part, and italicize Lone's thoughts because I've been doing that anyway. 
 

I'm just going to apologize for all three of these late replies in advance. 

I really appreciate this, though! I think I'll take your advice on the inhabitants-- they certainly aren't cats, no. xP 

For the bit about Lone, that does look better, thank you. 
 

I just... I absolutely love this chapter. The kangaroos were the best plot twist for this kind of story, and I was literally smiling and shaking my head. I really like your style of writing/how you have Jason tell the story; It's very 'boyish', and 'sassy' I could say. x) 
I only found two mistakes that stuck out to me-- " A really wanted some light so I could see them. " Correct A to I. 

And-- ". . .Gosh, we were so freaking handsome too, I hope that mnster dies in a hole or something! " Just add an 'o' to that one. 

Sure, of course!
Oh, right-- If you could check out Kingdom Shifters that would be great! We could do critiques if you want, though it may take me a bit to finish up this prologue/pre-book, and catch up with the other ones in this series of yours, if you'd want me to read it all for critiques. 

" What I just said didn't match what I told me. They couldn't be the same Alexes. " 
Sorry, I just noticed a little error. Did you mean 'he', or 'Jason'? And maybe instead of 'Alexes' just Alex would work. Whatever you feel for that one. (Besides me just being paranoid with corrections here) I'm really interested in this so far!