Sparkatale

I don't know whether you mean the one chapter or you have the whole thing written. It seems really interesting. If anything, I would make it all past tense or all present, but not both. There's also some fast-paced parts and misspelled words. I liked your beginning/end and how it was very descriptive. It's not really my favorite style, but I'm looking forward to reading the rest. 👍

David Boyce | January 8, 2014

The version of "The accident" that is up right now is the new version. I deleted the old version by mistake. I still have it but it's not on SparkaTale. Anyways, I also changed the tense problem. Sorry about that, I wrote kind of fast and didn't really look at the tense. I will soon post a new chapter to my story. Thank you for taking the time of actually leaving a comment here.

Maeve Kilcullen | January 14, 2014

You're welcome. It's a really interesting story. Let me know if you would like comments on the rest.

David Boyce | January 14, 2014