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Hi there! I just published my first story on this site, and I was wondering If anyone would like to read it. Please tell me on what I need to improve, and also, I don't mind critics. My story is called " Jester".
by Seraphin Scarlet | Sep 26th 2013, 05:28
Heya! I'm here to review your story... I'm not experienced in critiquing but I will try and give you an honest opinion. Interesting premise. Just some picky things about basic grammar and such. Sometimes your tenses are a little jumbled. It makes it a little confusing--it's perfectly fine to write a story in past tense, or even present, but you should definitely just stick to one. Also, I believe it's "Times have changed," rather than "Times has change." I'm going to wait and see how the rest of your story goes before I remark on the plot... but I'm excited! Keep going! Looking forward to seeing you improve! I'm sure the story will turn out great!
ReplyLiz uli | October 27, 2013
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