Sparkatale

Everything hangs in the balance when a six hundred year old spirit makes it her mission to possess Emperor Cyne. All Velry wanted was to go home and forget the tortures of the last year, but with Niek, a Keeper born with necromantic powers, the two must fight their way through a crazed religious order and a horde of undead pawns in order to stop the Blood Queen's mad plan.


Hello all. My name is Niek, not to be confused with the character. I'm hoping to get some feedback and my novel and I would love any sort of critiques you could lend me. I'm particularly interested in learning everyone's thoughts on Chapter Two and beyond. I know there are typos and once the entire book is finished, I will go back in and take care of the minor typos. I am, however, interested in what you think of the characters, the story, the dialogue. What elements work? What elements don't? Does this character's actions not make sense? Anything you could give me would be very helpful because I'm always trying to improve. If you leave a critique, I will return one for one of your stories within in a decent time frame. Please and thank you.