Thud, Thud, Thud,
Goes something in the night,
Thud, Thud, Thud,
You think you’ll die of fright.
Pat, Pat, Pat,
Your slippers down the hall,
Pat, Pat, Pat,
You couldn’t sleep at all.
Chich, Chich, Psh,
Went the match book in one hand,
Chich, Chich, Psh,
The candle lit the land.
Rattle, Rattle, Rattle,
Went the door knob as it turned,
Rattle, Rattle, Rattle,
Your stomach got the churns.
Gulp, Gulp, Gulp,
Goes the lump inside your throat,
Gulp, Gulp, Gulp,
The hall is like a moat.
Rub, Rub, Rub,
Went the loose nail on the boards,
Rub, Rub, Rub,
You’ve made it to the door.
Step, step, step,
Down the stairs you go,
Step, step, step,
Down to the cellar below.
Creak, Creak, Creak,
The wood makes known your feet,
Creak, Creak, Creak,
Turn now and you might freak.
Stomp, Stomp, Stomp,
Too late to turn back now,
Stomp, Stomp, Stomp,
Your mother would have a cow!
Drip, Drip, Drip,
Goes the pipes beneath the walls,
Drip, Drip, Drip,
Perhaps the monsters jaws.
Growl, Growl, Growl,
Went the movements of the house,
Growl, Growl, Growl,
Maybe a giant mouse?
Closer, Closer, Closer,
You draw to the hideous thing,
Closer, Closer, Closer,
You hear the alarm clock RING!
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Chapter: 1
It's not very scary, but i like it all the same. I think you could make this into a cute childrens book.
January 4, 2014 | Heather O'toole /Davies
Thanks! I might just do that. I've been wanting to team up with a friend of mine for some time...
January 5, 2014 | Miheal Larson 3rd
Chapter: 1
Haha, what an ending! Did not expect that... But I can fully sympathize, especially on school-day mornings. Ahem, I found half the poem repetitive, but that's like a double edged sword I guess. It might be overdone, but the onomatopoeia is also endearing in some way.
Also, should I be embarrassed to say admit I shivered somewhere while reading this? Hmm, maybe it's the depressing music I'm listening to... Or the winter chill in the air. Or this poem... Probably a combination of all three. Anyways, good job.
January 5, 2014 | Liz uli
Thank you! I'm glad you thought so. O don't normally white poetry, so when I do, it's normally love poems and heartbreak this and that.
January 5, 2014 | Miheal Larson 3rd