Sparkatale

Now that was an enjoyable chapter and have to admit, grabbed my attention.

It started fairly interesting but not in an overly unique way, but when Bri asked if she can have a corpse, I was yours. That twist was so shocking that it kept me glued to the chapter. A job well done with this.

What stands out at this point is the witty dialogue. There's a lot of it, but it's fine since it's really well-written and entertaining, providing the necessary info in a natural way.

The characters. Especially Bri captured my heart - I suppose she's a zombie-maker. Her sharp tongue just pressures me to like her.

The writing style is fine. I've noticed repetitions in several spots, but other than that the narration is fluent and the descriptions graphic and thorough.

I look forward to meeting other characters.

There's a lot of dialogue because this is actually an RP between two people. :D If you look closely enough, you can actually tell where one person stops writing, and the other picks up! 

I'd gone through on a second draft and weeded out things that led to dead ends,and smoothed dialogue and plot holes. So far, Re'Shuul is going through for the final draft as I upload chapters. (He doesn't have the time to read straight through like I did.) 

So no, it won't read entirely like a novel! It's buttered up to be like one! I'm glad you love her! Bri and Kale are the main characters through most of the book, but tides turn a little once you hit a certain chapter. Things get deeper and more complex as you go, and since there will be seven books total (we're as I speak now 280 pages into book 2,) it's going to get REALLY intense.

Thank you so much!