Status: Completed
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Created: February 14, 2015 | Updated: January 1, 2024
Genre : Action
Language : English
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Its a good story. I hope you continue it. I'd really like to see the ending
February 24, 2015 | F. M.F.
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This is really good. No other comment out there, a side from the punctuation of dialogue tags, 'cause I ignore tenses, I can understand sentences without tenses.
"What happen!?" Due to 'what' - it's understandable the he is confused, so, you don't need to write this '?' just "What happen!" - 'cause it's obvious.April 7, 2016 | Hearm jan