Status: In Progress
Summary:
Shortly after the tragic loss of her mother, 17 year-old Amelia Pettibone finds solace in the stacks of a decrepit library. After finding and "borrowing" a mysteriously unfinished novel, Amelia's young brother, Oliver, disappears. Amelia sets off on a desparate quest to rescue Oliver.
Created: August 20, 2013 | Updated: December 15, 2013
Genre : General
Language : English
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| 2: | Chapter II | 1796 |
| Total Wordcount: | 3339 |
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You have beautiful writing. It flows nicely and the mood of the piece just falls in place. Amelia seems very mature, and I am interested to see what happens later in the story. Only wish there were more for me to read...
Also, on a bit of a more critical note, I was a little shocked at the end to find the the chapter had ended so abruptly. Maybe you could find a way to wrap up the chapter a little better so that the reader isn't so surprised? I was expecting a little more to happen and felt it was a little awkward. It's a lovely start and I just think the ending should do the rest justice.
I would love to see where this goes! Keep going!
November 6, 2013 | Liz uli
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Thank you for your feedback - it motivated me to finally post Chapter II ( except now I need to start working on the next one)!
I agree I can be really abrupt at times. It's something I need to work on.
November 6, 2013 | Jamie Grove
