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Created: November 6, 2013 | Updated: November 8, 2013
Genre : Fantasy
Language : English
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This story has an extreme amount of potential. Very intriguing from the start, and a very good snapshot of the plot. Just a couple of nitpicky things.
First, I believe there is excessive use of ellipses ("...") sometimes. I personally love using "...," but be careful not to use them too much or they lose some of their effect. It is perfectly appropriate to put a comma in… read more
November 8, 2013 | Liz uli