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Created: October 16, 2013 | Updated: October 1, 2015
Genre : Fantasy
Language : English
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You mean perform, not preform.
This is a bit confusing. Interesting idea but could be executed far better.
September 30, 2015 | Chantelle Bosch
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I tried to read this but I gave up after the second paragraph.
The yunu, especially with the mention of their long hair, reminds me of the yunu from Star Wars. Unfortunately I'm not a fan of Star Wars so I lost interest. You may want to consider renaming your creature because if I'm thinking hairy rainforest species from the best thing since sliced bread (ala SW), then chances are a whole lot of people who ARE fans will think the same.
Which, in essence, kills the authenticity of this piece.
September 30, 2015 | Chantelle Bosch
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Yunü are Taoist nymphs and existed, in myth and literature, long before Lucas produced whatever chapter of Star Wars you mentioned.. I did not name them, except as individual yunü, and I am unaware of any yunu in Star Wars. Check any book of Chinese myth, where they may also be named Jade Maidens. They have a male counterpart called jintong or Golden Boys
September 30, 2015 | Lynn Hollander
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Right, I understand you meant some mythological being, but the fact remains that there are creatures in a very popular and famous fictional world with the same name and similar characteristics.October 1, 2015 | Chantelle Bosch
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Coincidences happen, but I think yunü trumps yunu: the nymphs have seniority. Since yunu look nothing like yunü, who usually look like beautiful young women, I believe even SW fans can tell them apart.
October 1, 2015 | Lynn Hollander
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