Sparkatale

I'm loving this stuff! You weren't joking on being on a writing streak :D

Okay, this is quite possibly one of the best stories I've read so far. Usually I find that reading/writing 3000+ words is a bit of a daunting task, but your writing just has such smooth transition that it doesn't feel drawn out at all. It actually felt like less than it was, I was actually a bit sad when it ended! 

Your choice of description is vivid and not repetitive in the least. Honestly, there's something really charming about your writing I can't quite place my finger on it though. I feel it might be the atmosphere, your story really has a classical feeling to it, and it works really well! 

I've only spotted a few hiccups that I think you might want to know about. Hopefully they'll help you with your editing. I know when people comment on my work and point out my mistakes it really helps me out 'cause editing is my least favourite part about writing :D

"You're late," Rught exclaimed. - This was written in past tense, whereas the rest of the story was presented in present tense. 

"Had the whole thing been a dream, or did they somehow utilize some unknown power to visit him in his subconscious? As more and more minutes begin ticking off the clock.." - There's nothing wrong with the grammar, it's just that there's a fairly large space between "his subconscious?" and "As more and more.." 

Also, there was a bit of repetitiveness when the characters spoke, as they 'declare' stuff a whole bunch :D It doesn't really hinder your story, just thought I'd point that out.

Not a whole lot to edit, which I applaud! The ending of the story is just the cherry on top, to finish off the delicious cake which is your story. I'm honestly in love with your style of writing, and I'm green with envy right now! 

This was an absolute joy to read, and I'll be sure to look deeper into your other works at a later date.

Cheers!